My motivation is the fight to win,
The struggle to remain true to the
Craft of writing, show it is all
Amazing and wonderful
And pure to the end of
The very world that
We live in, for
Wonder,
Life.
My inspiration is the truth in love,
The beauty of all the human life,
And the creators that came so
Much earlier than me or
Anyone else I know.
The moments which have
Hurt me, or made
Me feel joy
In great
Forms.
My life is my writing, and all other crafts,
My life is my one true inspiration,
My life is my sole motivation,
Those who encounter me make marks
On my mind, and on my heart.
All who I see have their
Stories to tell, and
One day, I may
Manage to
Write them
Out.
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This is another of my syllable poems, this one an entry for 'alwaysmotivated's contest, entered into the 'What Motivates You' section ([link])
All comments appreciated! Comments
 i love the last stanza in this.
the first one feels like it kind of gets muddled towards the end...at around the fifth line, it starts making less sense to me. but it seems like you had a very rigid structure to try to stick to. i admire you for being able to do it so well! Yes, I feel that the last stanza has the strongest message to it.
I completely agree, and several people have pointed this out to me. I find it very hard to be perfectly coherent in this form. Thank you very much, but I doubt I will do many poems like this again, they are often more trouble than they are worth. Thanks for the lovely comment  -- Me: It's generally my writing goal- to make the audience really *feel* the work Matt: That's nice. Although it would be nicer if you followed that rule and wrote HAPPY stuff...  Me: Ooh! Today I stood up and walked around the house!!! Chess: no. way  Ohh, i really like this
 It sounds very nice, i don't think i've ever seen this style before but i really like the effect it's created here I more or less agree with what =julietcaesar said, it starts to sound a bit forced, and to me it also makes less sense. I the start of every stanza makes sense, but when i read further down a stanza i kinda lose the point and i don't get what you're trying to tell me there. If that makes sense. By the way, why is the first stanza one line shorter than the other two? I think it lacks a line with 3 syllables. Might just be my un-familiarity with the style, of course.  Overall, though, nice piece! Well done -- Songs & Lyrics #Lyrics-Community#LyricalPoets#lyriclub Poetry Comments & Critiques #Xpose-it#ProjectComment or send me a note Literature in the spotlights? Thanks, it's a style I use frequently, but I don't think that I will be using it much any more. Honestly, I find it's only good at being aesthetically pleasing.
Yes, I agree that it sounds forced, and that is my main regret about this style, as limitations do not work so well on my writing, which is really my voice in so many things. I see what you are getting at with this. Oh, goodness! I actually hadn't noticed. Thank you so much. I'll see if I can remedy that, but there are only so many things I can say that would even remotely fit in that space. Thank you very much for the lovely comment, and for pointing out the error. I really appreciate it. -- Me: It's generally my writing goal- to make the audience really *feel* the work Matt: That's nice. Although it would be nicer if you followed that rule and wrote HAPPY stuff... Me: Ooh! Today I stood up and walked around the house!!! Chess: no. way I see
and it's alright  -- Songs & Lyrics #Lyrics-Community#LyricalPoets#lyriclub Poetry Comments & Critiques #Xpose-it#ProjectComment or send me a note Literature in the spotlights?  I like your passion for self motivation. That's good that you don't need anyone else to motivate you.
I'm so faving this. Keep up that good work. -- Why is there BACON IN THE SOAP!??!!??!!?!? Thank you very much. I sometimes think it can be better to be reliant on self-motivation, because it's so much harder to blame someone else for a lack of ideas or rewards.
Thank you, again. -- Me: It's generally my writing goal- to make the audience really *feel* the work Matt: That's nice. Although it would be nicer if you followed that rule and wrote HAPPY stuff... Me: Ooh! Today I stood up and walked around the house!!! Chess: no. way  This is really good, I love the way you've expressed yourself with it. Makes me feel your passion for writing when I read it. And I'm loving the triangles!
 Congratulations on 2nd place.  -- '...with your little fists'   Lots of faves and NO comments? I can't believe this, considering this got second place!
In your syllable poetry style, you've really tackled the theme well. It feels a little forced in places, but that's to be expected, but otherwise, it's a nice poem that really shows your sources of motivation that are behind your writings. -- Prose admin for =DailyLitDeviations. Note me with your suggestions of good prose on dA! Do deviations on deviantART inspire you? Come join #DeviouslyInspired today! #theWrittenRevolution #Scribblers-Anonymous |
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